Dreams, floaters, peripheral visions, third eye sightings, almost theres, ghosts, cherished illusions, flotsam, table scraps and little dancing particles
The shape and sounds of this poem work really well together to move towards the last line,relics of a relationship. It's sucessful too in suggesting what remains unsaid. Liked this a lot.
Yes, dead relationships always leave sad reminders, but for goodness sake, throw it out with the wet tissues... maybe not. You could always use it to clean your sink drain pipe while muttering appropriate expletives!
Dear Joan: The flow of your poem reminds me of Haiku. The relationship is a relic. Love this concept! Once meaningfully sharing part of one's life and now just a thing to be discarded as easily. Most Succinct. Very Astute. Poignant!
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I could feel the loneliness in this..very well done!
Lots of punch in your Magpie ~ very nice!
Relics of a relationship....well done....bkm
The shape and sounds of this poem work really well together to move towards the last line,relics of a relationship. It's sucessful too in suggesting what remains unsaid. Liked this a lot.
Yes, dead relationships always leave sad reminders, but for goodness sake, throw it out with the wet tissues... maybe not. You could always use it to clean your sink drain pipe while muttering appropriate expletives!
Relics of a relationship. Brilliant work. :-)
Nice work, I also like the last line..
Always something to remind us...
Haha, I just read Stafford's comment!! Right!!
Beautiful and sad. Nice one, Joan.
ouch. things left behind...headed toward the trash can of memory...smiles. nice magpie!
Dear Joan: The flow of your poem reminds me of Haiku. The relationship is a relic. Love this concept! Once meaningfully sharing part of one's life and now just a thing to be discarded as easily. Most Succinct. Very Astute. Poignant!
Beautifully crafted -
I love the way you sum up the end of the poem...relics of a relationship. I had no idea what to do with this one. You hit it right on the mark.
Miscellaneous items sum up a broken relationship. Nice work.
Some souvenirs should not be kept.
Nice job capturing so much in so few words.
perfectly put. small and simple things can be so poignant, hold so much loss. really great Magpie!
Oh, and I love your blog title!
Wonderful magpie. It's amazing how little things linger to remind us who was once there.
perfect capture of sad solitude
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